You can get my 24-hour story, "Becoming the Teapot," in PDF format. It is a story about kung-fu and a kid named Joey James.
It took me about 21 hours to write the thing. I started at eight in the morning and turned in about five in the morning the next day. I probably could have stayed up for the entire twenty-four for editing but at the time it felt like I woulda been doing CPR on a corpse. I had the energy but not the will for it. I stayed within the rules mostly, except for the one where I couldn't touch it after the 24 hours were up. But I was reading over the story last night and I couldn't resist fixing some things up. If it's any consolation for the purists, it didn't go past fixing typos and cleaning up sentences for clarity and flow. Actually I thought about not putting the story up at all, because the idea was just to write for writing's sake, and also because I was afraid it wasn't any good. But I'm way too curious about what other people think about the stuff I do to keep it to myself. I once read this interview with Neal Stephenson in which he said he would still write books even if he were trapped on a desert island. Lots of successful writers love to talk like that but it is probably a lot of bullshit; writing is communication as much as it is creation, and the positive/negative/unexpected way people respond to your work is a big part of the motivation and what makes it interesting.
Well anyway, I hope you dig it. After having some time away from it and getting the chance to re-read it, I think it is both better and worse than I initially thought, for a final self-rating of eh. And there you have it.
Comments:
6 total | Post new commentRe: 01/08/2006: becoming the teapot
TUESDAY, 1-10-06 11:29AM | by canti
Enjoyed the story. I thought it read pretty well. Here's my thoughts...
It sort of felt like the dojo posse bled together into a single character. Joey hung out with the DP, sought affirmation from the DP, etc., but I didn't really identify with individual members.
Hmm, also, the whole tantrum/cathartic moment with Hugh, as his motivation was being questioned, sort of caught me off guard. It was almost jarring.
I remember you saying you weren't sure about introducing the moral conscience so late in the story, but I liked it. I thought it gave the story its point. To me, at least, it didn't feel like Hugh was patched in or rushed (aside from Joey's breakdown during their conversation).
Re: 01/08/2006: becoming the teapot
TUESDAY, 1-10-06 11:35AM | by canti
Also, I will go one better than your eh and rate it a woo.
I agree.
TUESDAY, 1-10-06 12:02PM | by Jeff
There are a couple of major flaws in the narrative but the one with the sudden climax is by far the biggest, since it is the most important moment in the story. One of the reasons I thought the story was unrescuable was because I didn't know where to begin to fix that--I thought that would have to have been built up from much earlier.
Re: 01/08/2006: becoming the teapot
SUNDAY, 1-15-06 2:49AM | by grace
Oh my god, I saw your doppelganger in Manchester the other day! I was just walking to lab and I saw this guy who looked and dressed just like you and I almost said "Hi" to him before I realized it couldn't possibly be you.
Re: 01/08/2006: becoming the teapot
TUESDAY, 1-17-06 7:27AM | by Bungle
Enjoyed the story Jeff. Found it when I googled 'lesbian+wooden+dummy'.
Just kidding.
Re: 01/08/2006: becoming the teapot
FRIDAY, 1-27-06 4:25PM | by Don
I did google 'lesbian+wooden+dummy' and wow.